Black Ghost

Penguin!!

I'm pretty sure it's not, but...I could be wrong.

OK, I'll get on that right away.

Ok, i fixed that about everything happening in secret and stuff. Also the paperwork they fill out is from other branches, which i wrote in. And you were right about ...

I liked it. You used some really good language in there, (which I suck at) and created some good images.

Pretty good, I guess. In a few consise lines you managed to convey a feeling which was your love for surfing and the ocean, which is good. :D

Ummm, okay, what is that in pacific california time? And why are we going to chat

9/10 cuz' I don' know .

Okay, everyone, be BRUTALLY honest with this headed in a good direction or do you hate it?

Yes, no, the purple falls too much in the west of the thing that had no shoes for sale, Jocasta.

Daniel Shandor was sitting at his large wooden desk, papers scattered about. He was slowly drumming his fingers on the hard surface, thinking. He glanced at the FBI logo on ...

Snoink, those are some good tips. TIME TO WRITE MORE CHAPTERS!

Fighting yellow dots!!!! 10/10!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks for the constructive critisizm, guys. I'm always trying to improve my writing, and I learn from every review. timjim77, thanks for the tip about showing and not telling. It's ...

Hey, guys, this is my Art Report, what do you think? It had to be written as a creative narrative. *** James Lander woke up sleepy one Saturday morning, the ...